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« on: April 30, 2011, 08:18:13 AM » |
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A voice from Heaven to give us love
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« Reply #1 on: April 30, 2011, 08:53:25 AM » |
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girl like an angel from high above.
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« Reply #2 on: April 30, 2011, 11:13:25 AM » |
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My very best Irish celebrity friend
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« Reply #3 on: April 30, 2011, 11:23:20 AM » |
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With whom my time I like to spend.
So far we have:
A voice from heaven to give us love,
girl like an angel from high above.
My very best Irish celebrity friend,
with whom my time I'd like to spend.
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frenchlaly
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« Reply #4 on: April 30, 2011, 03:25:38 PM » |
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yeah love it!! continue guys!  |
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« Reply #5 on: April 30, 2011, 03:37:12 PM » |
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Oh yes maybe we should correct ourselves as well. Or feel free to post our opinions on a verse or if we think that it doesn't sound right or so. After all we want to send Chloë a fantastic poem, don't we?  |
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« Reply #6 on: April 30, 2011, 03:51:37 PM » |
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Without any doubts a beautiful lady,
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frenchlaly
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« Reply #7 on: April 30, 2011, 04:03:04 PM » |
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She has just to smile to make us happy
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« Reply #8 on: April 30, 2011, 04:07:11 PM » |
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we'll try to write a wonderful poem , no, we WILL write a wonderful poem!!! together we'll see if there's something to change ,to the end all suggestions are welcome |
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« Reply #9 on: April 30, 2011, 04:17:10 PM » |
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Shall we write using "she" or "you"? I think the you makes the poem more personal, doesn't it?  Next line: Eyes bright blue like the sea --> or even ocean or sky, whatever you want |
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« Reply #10 on: April 30, 2011, 06:17:23 PM » |
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Let's do the second stanza. I'll start out.
Her heart is almost just like mine
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« Reply #11 on: May 01, 2011, 04:51:01 AM » |
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Ok one moment Kimberly. We've already started the second stanza We have: A voice from heaven to give us love,
girl like an angel from high above.
My very best Irish celebrity friend,
with whom my time I'd like to spend.
Without any doubts a beautiful lady,
she has just to smile to make us happy.
Eyes bright blue like the sea --> or even ocean or sky, whatever you want Your's can be the beginning of the third stanza if it's ok? Her heart is almost just like mine |
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frenchlaly
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« Reply #12 on: May 01, 2011, 07:31:21 AM » |
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ok if "her heart is almost just like mine" is the last verse of the second stanza, we could make a rhyme with " eyes bright blue like the sea... " by writting something with "shine" as rhyme? any suggestion for this verse i don't know how to write a good sentence... if you've got an other rhyme with "mine" maybe it could be easier i'll search it's a good idea to tell "you" ! |
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« Reply #13 on: May 01, 2011, 08:13:45 AM » |
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Ok what about these last two lines of the second stanza: Your heart is almost just like mine,
good and warm like sun shine.And then the beginning of the third stanza... Well we definitely have to mention her eyes I don't know, there are words that rhyme to "sea" (for example "me" or so) or if you take "sky" for example "fly" or so... So then we have the first two stanzas: A voice from heaven to give us love,
girl like an angel from high above.
My very best Irish celebrity friend,
with whom my time I'd like to spend.
Without any doubts a beautiful lady,
she has just to smile to make us happy.
Your heart is almost just like mine,
good and warm like sun shine. |
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« Reply #14 on: May 01, 2011, 08:16:31 AM » |
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Next stanza:
Golden hair and sky blue eyes
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